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10. Assessment Link

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Assessment Link (Rewrite Practice)

  • Choose one scene from Chapter 4 to rewrite.
  • Rewrite the scene in first person, from the perspective of …
    • Crooks
    • Curley’s Wife OR
    • Candy
  • Keep the key events and dialogue mostly the same, but show the inner thoughts, feelings, and observations.

Tips

Example Scenes

  1. Crooks’ conversation with Lennie.
  2. Curley’s Wife confronting the men (Crooks, Candy, and Lennie).
  3. Candy and Crooks talking about the dream of owning land.

Example

Model Paragraph

I leaned back slow in my chair as the big guy shuffled into my room. He had that look — the one folks get when they don’t rightly see you. Just a body sittin’ there, just another piece of the barn like the rake or the pitchfork. I told him he didn’t belong here, tried to sound sharp, tried to protect the little bit of space I got. But when he smiled all dopey-like and started talking about that damn farm, I felt something twist up inside me — a thing I hadn’t felt in a long while. Hope. Fool’s hope, maybe, but it burned for a moment, hot and painful. I pictured myself working that land, tending my own chickens, not having to bow my head to any man. But it didn’t last. It never does. By the time that white woman showed her face at my door, sneering like she owned the whole damn ranch, I knew better. Ain’t no farm for a man like me. Just four walls and the quiet, pressing in again.

Criteria

  • First-person Voice
    • Shown through “I”, “me”, and “my” (personal pronouns).
  • Tone Shift
    • Effectively changes the tone of voice dependent on the context of the scene.
    • For example, in the model paragraph, the tone shifts from brief hope → bitterness and isolation.
  • Emotive and Sensory Imagery
    • Effectively describes how the character physically feels.
    • For example, in the model paragraph, Crooks feels “twisted up inside” and had “burned hope”.
  • Consistent Characterisation
    • Effectively portrays the character based on Steinbeck’s presentation of the character.
    • For example, in the model paragraph, Crooks’ loneliness, bitterness, and cautiousness match how Steinbeck portrays Crooks.
  • Contextual Understanding
    • Effectively illustrates the context in the book when rewriting the scene.
    • For example, in the model paragraph, it shows an understanding of Crooks’ marginalisation due to racism and status.

Response

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